Tom Oliver's Artifact.....

Seems like all the smart people are getting other people to do their artifacts for them !!! Tom Oliver wants a group of people each to write a script for him to make into a film with various people over the internet..... I am participating and this is the brief he set.......

The story idea is as follows. Sarah is a 26 year old single woman. She keeps an online video blog. She has recently turned her attention to the online world for comfort and to look for companionship. She chats to various people from all over the world, however she has never met any of these people in the "real world". She has recently been talking to someone online called Chris. Things were going OK to start with, until Chris starts to act obsessive and intense. What is the story behind the mysterious character of Chris? Do the two characters ever meet in real life? Is there more to them than meets the eye?

The overall style of the film will be a psychological thriller.

The script must feature at least two characters, Sarah and Chris.

and this is my first scene for his film.......

SCENE ONE :

IT'S EARLY MORNING. AROUND 9.30AM. SARAH IS AWAY FROM HER COMPUTER MAKING A CUP OF TEA. HER COMPUTER IS MAKING SPORADIC ALERT NOISES. SARAH LEAVES THE TEA AND GOES BACK TO THE COMPUTER THE SCREEN READS....

Chris1984 says :
no ?
do u think ?
k ?
helloooooooo ?
alone again ?

SARAH LAUGHS AND STARTS TO TYPE....

Sarah_08 says :
i'm still ere u fool. You can get so demanding sometimes.
Chris1984 says :
ohh so u r ere den ? i fort u'd left me
Sarah_08 says :
making a cup of t. Wat wur u sayin ?
Chris1984 says :
i wuz sayin dat i've got 2 much space ere. But it feels gud 2 ave my own place.
Sarah_08 says :
yeah, i wuz like that @ 1st.
Chris1984 says :
u got ur own place ? where'd u live ?
Sarah_08 says :
yeah, got my own place
Chris1984 says :
really ? where ?
Sarah_08 says :
it wuz scary 2 start wit but now i'm fine.
Chris1984 says :
yeah, i'm alone. Need some company.
Sarah_08 says :
don't we all

THERE IS A KNOCK AT THE DOOR WHICH MAKES SARAH JUMP

Chris1984:
knock knock

SARAH STARES AT THE WORDS.

THE DOOR KNOCKS AGAIN

Chris1984 :
knock knock Sarah

THE LETTERBOX KNOCKS. SARAH WALKS SLOWLY TOWARD THE DOOR TIGHTENING HER DRESSING GOWN AS SHE GOES.

SARAH : Who is it ?

VOICE : Royal Mail Miss !

SARAH LOOKS THROUGH THE SPY-HOLE. A MAN DRESSED IN ROYAL MAIL UNIFORM STANDS IN THE CORRIDOR WITH AN ARMFUL OF OTHER MAIL.

SARAH OPENS THE DOOR.

MAILMAN : ohhh i'm sorry, did i wake you !? Sign here.

SARAH SIGNS. SHUTS THE DOOR AND RETURNS TO HER COMPUTER TO READ.....

Chris1984 says :
knock knock ?
Sarah ?
knock knock ?
who's there you say ?
Sarah !
Sarah who you say ?
Sarah reason you're not laughing !?
...... Sarah ? hello ? cup of tea again ?
look i know it's pretty lame up come on ?!

SARAH SITS DOWN A BIT FLUSTERED

Sarah_08 says :
Sorry Chris, mail man. Jessssus, that's so stupid. Anyway, gotta go, i'm late. Speak 2 u 2nite ?
Chris1984 says :
definitely !

END OF SCENE ONE

Don't know if you wanted some little fake suspense or anything early on ? anyway, those are my two cents.

ps : i attempted "internet speak" and it's prrrrrrrrrrrrrrobably the most annoying thing in the world so forgive the inconsistancy of my script. From now on just imagine it's in internet speak...... it won't be though.